Cupid’s Kissing Scene Competition!

     Lord Caden is a dark, sexy incubus and the secondary ruler of a planet. Lux loathes him; one, because Lux is a rebel in the planet’s civil war and two, because Lord Caden swept the girl Lux loves off her feet. But when he tries threatening Lord Caden to get the girl back, Lord Caden just laughs and Lux winds up in his bed. Now, after a week of battling guilt and temptation, Lux stands outside Lord Caden’s palace.

     Lord Caden opened the door and Lux started.  The black-haired incubus leaned against the jamb. He smiled.
     Lux opened his mouth and then closed it again.  “I don’t even know what to say to you.”
     Lord Caden laughed.  “You may have an addiction.”
     Lux flexed his hands in their checkered, fingerless gloves.  “I need to touch you.” Lord Caden held his palms up and spread them apart in invitation. Lux’s heart raced and he reached out.  His fingertips hovered above Lord Caden’s chest.  Finally they connected, brushing the expensive black fabric.  He breathed in.  He traced the shirt’s seam to the buttons, toying with one.  Lord Caden unfastened it for him, then the third, then the fourth.  Lux trailed his fingers down, afraid to touch his skin.
     “It’s okay,” Lord Caden said.  Lux flicked the hair out of his eyes and glanced away.  “Lux.” Lux allowed his thumb to venture off the black fabric onto the smooth, white skin of Lord Caden’s chest and shuddered.  “Come inside,” Lord Caden said.

***

     “This can’t keep happening,” Lux groaned.
     Lord Caden ripped through Lux’s jacket and shirt and cast them onto the bedroom floor.  “You may have wanted to consider that before you turned up on my doorstep.”
     “I just—” Lord Caden laced his fingers in the back of Lux’s hair and kissed him.  His tongue delved into Lux’s mouth, curling, coaxing.  Lux couldn’t breathe. Burning, dark liquidity wound its way from the base of his spine up into his throat, pulsing in his veins.  He whimpered.  The sweet, rich taste of Lord Caden was almost too much to bear. Lord Caden tugged his hair and a pleasured sound escaped Lux’s throat.  “Oh, good god.  I need to be closer to you.”
     “Mm,” Lord Caden agreed.  He let his shirt drop onto the floor.
     Lux ran his hands over the lord’s chest, his gloved palms sliding over the hard muscles.  Desire clenched his stomach.  “I’ve been thinking about this for a week,” he whispered.
     “Impressive self-control,” Lord Caden remarked.
     “Hardly.  I’m here, aren’t I?”
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19 comments

  1. I really like this. The fact that there’s a girl involved and this is such a forbidden fruit scenario just makes it that much more appealing. I like how confident and arrogant Lord Caden is, and how Lux seems both repulsed and attracted by him at the same time. Seems like an interesting premise you have here and I would love to keep reading. I wish they had a Most Naughty award because I’ve already given out my hottest and this doesn’t quite fit any of the others. 😦 Best of luck in the contest!

    Maggie (#27)

  2. I agree with Maggie, this definitely has a naughty element to it. Kind of like the professor and the student relationship. Great work! Love the ending 🙂

    Jessica #42

  3. This is VERY steamy indeed. I totally agree with Faithandrews when she mentioned the who professor/student relationship. There are a lot of really good lines too. I particularly like “Burning, dark liquidity wound its way from the base of his spine up into his throat, pulsing in his veins.”

    My only suggestion would be for this line: “He hesitated, his fingertips hovering above Lord Caden’s chest.”

    Take out “he hesitated” since we understand that he hesitating with his actions. You tell us and then show us. Just show us! I’m super bad when it comes to that too.

    Otherwise this is so intense and quite lovely! Good luck!

    -Amber (#41)
    My Kissing Scene

  4. Very clear sense of the confident, knowing, yes-I-AM-all-that-and-a-bag-of-crisps-thank-you-very-much Lord Caden. I can tell he’s the bad boy you can’t help but want 😉

    I would like to see more conflict, more of an internal struggle, from Lux – if he “LOVED” this girl Caden stole, I want him to be more torn up about it…or maybe more pissed at himself for falling for the same man his lady love had fallen for..or maybe this helps Lux understand…ooh so many possibilities! I’m sure you explore them more in the full MS.

    Best of luck to you!
    Melonie (kiss #29)

    1. Yes, I do. 🙂 That week Lux spends thinking about Lord Caden before this scene is fraught with self-loathing, fantasizing, and a whole lot of flip-flopping.

      Thanks for reading! 😀

  5. Ooh, very hot. I had a similar reaction as Melonie, in that I wanted to see more inner struggle, but you already said it’s on other pages. Ohh, those 350 words are just mean, aren’t they?
    Best of luck!
    Laura, Kiss #33, BSD #112

  6. Got to love them when they’re so bad, bad, bad. The only criticism I have of this scene is that it ended too soon. (Damn 350-word limits…) Please let us know when we can read more.
    –Barb (#38)

  7. Kissing Expert Kalen here to say I am left in a bit of a quandary here, because I want to award you the most lovable characters award except Cupid in her infinite wisdom (question mark?) has named it the CUTEST COUPLE AWARD and these two are not cute, oh my, no. They are sexy and snarky and snide alien incubi are basically my jam, so I must say screw it and award you the MOST LOVABLE COUPLE EVEN THOUGH THEY ARE THE OPPOSITE OF CUTE BECAUSE PUPPIES ARE CUTE AND THIS I S JUST SEXY award.

    I’ll get back to you on an acronym for that.

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